Part two - The other side of the argument

The second half of the writing focuses on the points in favour of the healthier options. You will find comments beneath each paragraph, explaining what the writer has done well.

Evidence against

However, a lack of choice of healthy options at lunchtimes may be one reason why pupils are not opting for them. On looking at the menu, we found that the only healthy option offered was jacket potatoes with cold fillings such as tuna or cheese. Students who were surveyed, pointed out that eating this every day would be boring and that the cold fillings are inadequate in winter. A wider choice of healthy food, including a range of hot main meals may be a more appealing choice for students.

Now the writer moves on to the views in favour of healthy food. The impersonal tone is maintained in the first sentence. The formal connective 'however' is used to signal a change in the argument. The writer returns to the facts - jacket potatoes are the only healthy option - and suggests some alternatives. They are building on the evidence mentioned earlier, towards a conclusion.

Solution

Nevertheless, it remains true that junk food is popular and easy to produce. If students start going off site they may get injured or into trouble, and the school could be held responsible. Therefore, it seems impractical to ban junk food altogether. But is there another answer? After gathering evidence from surveys with both canteen staff and students, I would recommend a wider selection of meals, including a range of healthier options, for one term. If successful, this initiative could be made permanent.

This detailed paragraph begins to suggest the solution. Formal connectives are used ('nevertheless' and 'therefore') to signal that the argument is coming to an end. The writer returns to a personal expression, 'I believe there is...' because they are summing up their findings.

Conclusion

In conclusion, the solution seems clear: if a good selection of food is provided then everyone will be happy - and the canteen will almost certainly gain more customers. Thank you for your time.

The final paragraph is short and direct. It sums up the main conclusion of the speech in a positive way: 'everyone will be happy' and 'the canteen will almost certainly gain...' which leaves the audience with a clear picture of the writer’s final point of view.

Rather than trying to persuade people one way or the other, the speech has tried to suggest a solution where everyone gains. This isn't always possible, but it can be a helpful way of concluding without sitting on the fence and telling the audience to make up their own minds. This is an excellent answer.