Stabbed in the back
I should start off by saying how impressed I am that you were able to tell such a long and complicated story. You structured it well, with a nice use of paragraphs to break the story up into important events. You also used a good range of structures and vocabulary. Here are a few things ‘to notice’:
Guilin sounds wonderful. I’d love to visit one day to see its beauty and experience the smell of flowers in the air. The beauty of the place also seemed to help put the spark back into Jane's relationship with her husband. My wife and I also have a similar dream of owning a house with a garden. Maybe one day I'll have green fingers like my mum...
However, things went downhill after the phone call from her brother-in-law, didn’t they? How did he not notice someone breaking into their little factory and stealing their computer? I’m not surprised Jane dashed to the station to catch a train back home.
The events which happened next really surprised me. How could her employees be so ungrateful? I think they stabbed her in the back by leaving her, starting their own business, and using the skills she had taught them to go into competition with her. I’m hardly surprised she cursed Sean and wanted to give him a good hiding for what he had done.
It must have been a shock for Jane to be questioned by the police over Sean’s disappearance. Did Sean’s wife really think that she was number 1 on the list of people who wished him harm?
The story really did end in tragedy for Sean, however. I’m sure his poor parents couldn’t get over what had happened to their son. He was chased and beaten to death by three men because he owed someone money. And one of the murderers was still at large! What a sad end to a young man’s life.
Even though what happened to Sean wasn’t Jane’s fault, I can completely understand why she decided never to curse anyone again for the rest of her life.
Today’s useful English:
(to) put the spark/romance back into a relationship
(to) go downhill (from that point OR after something)
(to) break into a house/shop/factory
(to) stab someone in the back
(to) start your own business/company
(to) go into competition (with someone)
(to) give someone a good hiding (for something)
(to be) questioned by the police (over/about something)
(to) wish someone harm
(to be able/unable to) get over something
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