Formal and informal writing - Test Bite

Hi there. 1 1 : 'Dear Sir', is a more formal way to begin a letter.

Well 2 2 : This word needs to be deleted. It's far too chatty and informal. , I think that teenagers have just as much right to vote in an election as someone who's 3 3 : This should be written out in full: 'who is'. as old as the hills! 4 4 : This is a cliché and sounds quite disrespectful. It would be better to just say elderly. The exclamation mark should be changed to a full stop too. They live in the country too, you know! 5 5 : 'You know' is too chatty. Delete it and the exclamation mark that follows. ! And 6 6 : 'In addition' would be a more formal way to begin this sentence. they're 7 7 : This should be wirtten out in full: 'they are' the future! 8 8 : Exclamation marks are too informal. So they're 9 9 : This should be written out in full: 'they are' bound to care about what's 10 10 : This should be written out in full: 'what is' going to happen to the country they live in when they're grown-up. But 11 11 : Avoid starting sentences with 'but' in formal writing. You could use 'on the other hand' to link the sentence to the previous idea. some people think that teenagers are away with the fairies 12 12 : This is a cliché. 'Irresponsible' sounds more formal. when it comes to important things like voting. But 13 13 : Rather than 'but' you could use 'though' at the end of the sentence instead. not all of us are. And anyway you know some grown ups are like that too 14 14 : This sentence doesn't sound like a sensible argument. It starts with 'And' whilst 'anyway' and 'you know' are unnecessary. 'Like that' has no power and is unclear. 'Immature' might be a better word to use instead. . So 15 15 : 'In conclusion' is a more formal way to sum up an argument. I think teenagers should be given a chance.

Cheers, 16 16 : Far too informal. 'Yours sincerely' or 'yours faithfully' is the usual way to end a formal letter

Andrew