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the darkness of winter

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  • Message 1. 

    Posted by jetguy2 (U13862190) on Friday, 26th November 2010

    The streets,
    Are dark and empty,
    My only company,
    Fag ends and booze bottles left behind,
    Somewhere behind me,
    A police siren,
    The tree's are bone bare,
    Their leaves crunch beneath my feet,
    A little longer to home,
    Somewhere to the right,
    A train speeds past,
    Miserable looking people,
    Sitting in silence,
    Can't wait to get home,
    My phone buzzes,
    Someone loves me,
    I'll look in a mo,
    Cold winds blowing,
    A plastic bag flutters past me,
    The street lights up,
    A car drives by,
    Driver looks tired,
    Second later it's back to black,
    Street lights trying to light it up,
    Failing miserably,
    Turn off this street,
    Down a back alley,
    The smell of chips,
    And half price booze,
    Fills my nostrils,
    Suddenly there's a flash,
    And then a slash,
    I'm on the ground,
    Hands feel over me,
    The I take a breath,
    Gasping in pain,
    Air tastes of p***,
    There's a shout from behind me,
    'Hey get off him',
    Sound of feet rushing,
    The worlds getting darker,
    Everything's a blur,
    Blue flashing lights?
    Shouting voices,
    They sound worried,
    It's getting darker,
    The voices get quieter,
    Now it's getting lighter.

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  • Message 2

    , in reply to message 1.

    Posted by English Host (U1934188) on Monday, 29th November 2010

    Blimey! Is this a poem about road safety? It's terrifying, Jetguy! And it's so sad that we never find out who loves the narrator! I did wonder if the reason they are hit is that they are checking to see who it is, but I can't see it is - it's just an accident. What gave you this idea, Jetguy? I'm going to make sure I take extra special care from now on...

  • Message 3

    , in reply to message 2.

    Posted by jetguy2 (U13862190) on Monday, 29th November 2010

    car accident?
    I wrote it to be about a man getting mugged...

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  • Message 4

    , in reply to message 3.

    Posted by English Host (U1934188) on Tuesday, 30th November 2010

    I just read it again - I think I must have a worse cold than I thought - sorry Jetguy - yes - it's totally clear. Stupid me!

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