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The Wolves

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  • Message 1. 

    Posted by Misty me (U10435401) on Tuesday, 23rd November 2010

    Hello! Misty here! Just wondering what you thought about this poem! It's called 'The Wolves'.

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    I remember when
    wolves could
    run wild. I
    rushed
    with them through
    winds of old, when the
    clutch of my
    earth was
    fresh beneath
    my feet and
    hands. I
    drank the
    hurry of the
    beat, of the
    sprint, of the tear
    of my limbs as we ran
    and hunted and
    ran because that
    was the
    clutch of
    the earth
    and sky
    and wind
    and sea.

    The stones and
    twigs clacked
    and cracked
    beneath my
    feet and
    the pads of
    wolves,
    like the
    bones of what
    we grasped
    with our
    teeth
    and hands
    and feet. They
    were naked
    things, my hands
    and feet and
    teeth, like
    that naked place
    that I
    knew around
    me, naked but
    for us and our
    bones and blood.

    The sweat
    of my
    swiftness would
    slug down
    my naked
    spine and
    stick to my
    wrists, the points of
    my bareness. The
    scent of the
    sweat
    reeled me and
    the wolves in
    its sodden
    thickness that
    was my
    scent, like
    the mud that
    coated the
    ground in
    fog when
    we rested within our
    clutch of what
    we knew.

    Everything
    thumped, we
    were the drums
    of
    the earth
    and sky
    and sea that could be
    seen and heard
    and touched.
    We would crouch
    low, haunches
    to the ground
    with dirt
    that could
    wrap us like
    sweat and
    air and
    water and blood.
    That was what we
    heard and
    felt through the
    tips of us and our
    clutch of the
    earth, what we
    once knew and
    now lies dead.

    We
    drank the
    hurry of the
    beat, of the
    sprint, of the tear
    of our limbs as we ran
    and hunted and
    ran because that
    was the
    clutch of
    the earth
    and sky
    and wind
    and sea.


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    Thanks for reading! Please let me know what you think!

    Misty

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  • Message 2

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    Posted by violetPixie (U14348064) on Tuesday, 23rd November 2010

    Wow, I don't really know what to say to this. I love it. it's very rhythmic, and I like the repetition of certain lines, that emphasises it and it seems like....I don't know, running or something. Some of the imagery is fantastic.

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    Posted by English Host (U1934188) on Wednesday, 24th November 2010

    Hey Misty - good to see you back! This has a wonderful sense of movement and tradition. It could be partially that' it involves wolves - creatures of myth and legend, but there's also quite an 'epic' feel about it too.

    I guess you weren't around when we moved - sadly Blast has to close, so all us messageboard guys have shifted over to Bitesize to continue our discussions. You can find us here:

    www.bbc.co.uk/dna/mb...

  • Message 4

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    Posted by nouran (U14713616) on Sunday, 5th December 2010

    Like it so much smiley - smiley keep it up

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