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  • Message 51

    , in reply to message 50.

    Posted by Lemonrabbit (U13893167) on Tuesday, 16th November 2010

    Awww, Kim, I love your input! I find it really useful, and I'm not just saying that. smiley - smiley I guess I'm just stuck in my ways.
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    Drifting On An Empty Ocean

    Feel the water rock
    The sodden boards beneath my knees
    As I hold them together,
    Got to keep it together.
    I'm drifting on an empty ocean,
    And I can see the seagulls circling.
    Weather-beaten,
    Tired and broken,
    Don't know if I'll survive the night.
    I think back to that day,
    A lifetime ago,
    When I severed my moorings
    And escaped to the empty sea.
    The lonely sea.
    Never thought I'd miss those days
    When I was just a slave,
    So constrained,
    But out here I'm nothing.
    I'm just drifting aimlessly,
    Hopelessly,
    Longing for a glimpse of land,
    Knowing it's no use.
    The water lifts me, lulls me,
    Lets me fall in endless loops,
    And I know I'll drift forever,
    Floating,
    Longing to sink and be done.

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  • Message 52

    , in reply to message 51.

    Posted by English Host (U1934188) on Wednesday, 17th November 2010

    He Lemonrabbit, another fine poem, I see. I particularly like the way you effortlessly slip into a little note-to-self line 'got to keep it together' before continuing with the poem.

    Are you going to be joining us over on Bitesize? I'd hate for you to be left behind - not least because I'd seriously miss your work!

    www.bbc.co.uk/dna/mb...

  • Message 53

    , in reply to message 52.

    Posted by Lemonrabbit (U13893167) on Wednesday, 17th November 2010

    Hmmmm, I guess. I started out there, actually, a long, long, loooong time ago. It kept telling me to come here, but I wasn't sure it was for me. The irony, huh? But I'll miss everyone if I don't, so, yeah. And woohoo! I achieved my goal and made it to two pages! Pointless, I know, but I feel all smug now. ^^ I suppose I'd best go introduce myself, huh?

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  • Message 54

    , in reply to message 53.

    Posted by English Host (U1934188) on Thursday, 18th November 2010

    I definitely do see the irony! But sadly Blast does have to go, and at least this way we all stay together. See you over there!

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