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• Message 1. Posted by Toast (U5022747) on Friday, 13th November 2009 permalink

  I wrote this short poem the other day, and I would really like some feedback - any at all. Thanks
  
  Falling Amber
  Let it go
  Leave the rage
  And journey home
  Times move on
  It's time to walk
  Accept the hurt
  Accept the shock
  Let it go. Just let it go.
  
  Breath deeply
  And slowly count to ten
  It can be promised
  It'll be alright in the end
  Exactly what'll happen
  Of that I can't be sure
  But Falling Amber
  Is here forever more.
  
  Falling Amber
  Let it go
  Leave the rage
  And journey home
  Times move on
  It's time to walk
  Accept the hurt
  Accept the shock
  Let it go. Just let it go.
  
  Sarah

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• Message 2. Posted by Toast (U5022747) on Saturday, 14th November 2009 permalink

  Sorry, wrong board. I only realised after I had posted. Please ignor.

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• Message 3. Posted by Toast (U5022747) on Sunday, 15th November 2009 permalink

  Can this thread please be moved to the writing board? Or can it be deleated so I can repost it on the writing board? because when I reposted it in the right place it was blocked for being spam because I'd already posted it once.
  Thanks.
  
  Sarah

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• Message 4. Posted by BBC auto-messages (U294) on Tuesday, 17th November 2009 permalink

  Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'Lounge' to 'Writing'.
  
  This Thread has been moved to the writing board from the lounge so that other writers can contribute.
  
  Thanks
  
  Oli

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• Message 5. Posted by Writing Host (U1934188) on Tuesday, 17th November 2009 permalink

  hey there- long time no see Miss Toast!!
  
  What a lovely poem - there's a deep feeling of peace - or impending peace here. Perhaps also of giving up - but in a positive way - a way that moves forward. Nice one!!

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• Message 6. Posted by Toast (U5022747) on Wednesday, 18th November 2009 permalink

  Thank you

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