Posted Apr 16, 2001 by Portable Chaos
Hi,
This is my most recent attempt at an entry, so any comments would be more than welcome. As I am not sure if my style of writing is what looked for here, please point out any obivous errors that I have made. It is all true [ although it may not seem like it ] I think it may be a to long but I could easily split it down into smaller sections.
Thanks in advance
portable chaos
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Posted Apr 17, 2001 by xyroth
It is traditional to put a link in to the article, so here it is http://www.bbc.co.uk/h2g2/guide/A535556
Now, as to the article, it seems to me, that it could do with a bit more polish. It doesn't quite seem to flow right. It also seems that you have two stories her, the adventures of mr foil, and the stories about a yard of ale. It is also possible, that as these are presentd as life history, they might want to be in your journal.
keep up the good work. 
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Posted Jan 2, 2002 by BBC auto-messages
Editorial Note: This conversation has been moved from 'The Writing Workshop' to 'The Flea Market'.
...the author appears to have 'left the building'.
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