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Posted Oct 15, 2003 by Chaiwallah HNM
The sun by any
other name would burn as hot.
I'd still get freckles.
nt: the new moon
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Posted Oct 16, 2003 by Mal
The new moon watches
an eye in the sky; waiting,
too, in the morning
(although what for I
daren't think, and I still hurry
on out of its gaze)
NT: Ripples
[PS, Chai: Can haikus be 575575, like mine? Or can they only be 575?]
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Posted Oct 18, 2003 by Chaiwallah HNM
Re:PS. No, Mal, they can only be 5/7/5. But on this thread consecutive haikus are not unknown.
Why is it ripples
In ice-cream promise so much
And taste so awful?
nt: Bounty Bars
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Posted Oct 19, 2003 by Pinniped
Confectionery?
Sold by glistening beach-bods?
I just eat them up.
nt : fantasising about the Flake-girl
(hope you don't mind an interloper, guys)
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Posted Oct 19, 2003 by Mal
Am I just too young
to know who the epithet
"Flake" refers to? Who?
NT: I'll pass this same one to Chai or whoever's still hanging around while I pop off to Google, probably to read about some old Flake adverts. Vesperal salutations, Pin!
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Posted Oct 21, 2003 by Chaiwallah HNM
When it came to licks,
Only the crumbliest flakes
Scattered like lust motes.
nt: Head and Shoulders
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Posted Oct 28, 2003 by Mal
Trademark oozes then
lathered up around
your Head & Shoulders
(I was going to leave this one for someone else cos I didn't have nuffin' to say- but they're all dead.)
NT: Anything! Somebody, anybody!
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Posted Oct 29, 2003 by Chaiwallah HNM
Dear Mac, gentle reminder, western haiku goes 5/7/5 syllables.
The voice of despair
Echoes in this empty thread.
What pair? Somebody?
nt: vile puns
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Posted Oct 29, 2003 by Mal
Sorry, Chai. I was tired and ill but I was desperate to put SOME life back into this ol' thread.
I'll give someone else a chance to do this one.
And why can't we do Eastern haiku? I mean, apart from the actual impossibility...
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Posted Oct 30, 2003 by Chaiwallah HNM
Hi Mac,
Apologies again for being, as usual, a pedantric old fart. Eastern haiku? Specifically shinto/Buddhist inspired authentic Japanese style?
That's a pretty tall order. No reason at all why you can't do it, if you're up to it. But it's generally a vehicle for expressing either paradoxical, mystical Zen-type insights, or other similar reflections on the transient and illusory nature of perceived existence.
The Japanese conventions are, I understand, fairly strict. There should be seventeen syllables, disposed 5/7/5. Two lines can be continuous, but one must stand alone. There should be a seasonal or natural-world reference. There should be a "surprise" in the way of insight or observation.
If you can do all that, good on ya, sport.
Cheers,
Chaiwallah.
nt still: vile puns!................any takers?
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Posted Oct 30, 2003 by Wayfarer-- I only wish I were crackly
Of lame and vile puns,
only vile ones are worthwhile
to the connoisseur.
nt: wine tasting, since that last word brings it to mind.
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Posted Oct 31, 2003 by Chaiwallah HNM
( Two for the price of one...)
The colour, the smell,
The taste, the finish. Aaaah bliss.
It's cheap! From Chile?
Brick red, flowers,
Blackberries and black pepper.
An Ozzie shiraz!
nt: loo paper
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Posted Nov 2, 2003 by killerbunny
they never refill
the damn loo paper, oh why
do i share a house?
the men are the worst
it's the same with kitchen roll
rant over now, bye
k -x-
nt: pit ponies
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Posted Nov 2, 2003 by Mal
Why oh why oh WHY
does everyone keep coming
up with subjects that
I don't know about,
don't understand, or just have
nothing to say for?
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Posted Nov 4, 2003 by Chaiwallah HNM
Are not pit ponies
A thing of the past these days?
Greed makes man cruel.
nt: teaspoons
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Posted Nov 5, 2003 by Wayfarer-- I only wish I were crackly
A teaspoon of salt
I should have added, not a
tablespoon. Biscuit...?
[holds one out]
nt: a specific mistake
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Posted Dec 10, 2003 by Mal
agreement stokes the
embers of
our conversation
(not meant to be
a western style
any more)
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Posted Dec 12, 2003 by Mal
Perhaps we should try,
reinserting some life,
making a renga?
"In Japan in the 15th century, a poetic form named "renga" blossomed.
Renga is a poem several poets create cooperatively. Members alternately add verses of 17 syllables (5, 7, and 5 syllables) and those of 14 syllables (7 and 7 syllables), until they complete a poem generally composed of 100 verses."
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Posted Dec 14, 2003 by Chaiwallah HNM
Interesting idea, Mal, but bearing in mind the awful fate of those who were sucked into the balladdiction of Grimley Moer, I'd be reluctant to join another co-operative poem chain.
So, reluctant shmeluctant, why not?
Maybe we should conclude with a reminder of the next verse structure, so that instead of putting "nt..........." and a new topic for a haiku, we should write "nv ( for next verse ) 14/17" ( for the number of permitted syllables). But, one question, do the 14 and 17 syllable verses invariably alternate? I guess we can be flexible ( as with western haiku ) so that the same person isn't always stuck on 17 or 14 syllables.
Here goes......
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RENGA..."Parting."
The vast sunset rolls
Over my sad heart, leaving
No more room for tears.
(nv 14 )
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Posted Dec 14, 2003 by R. Daneel Olivaw -- (User 201118) (Member FFFF, ARS, and DOS) ( -O- )
Or we could have an odd number of people:
Renga Verse 2:
The dark night falls upon the
Vast plain of my endless grief.
(Next verse 17)
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