Posted Jun 6, 2009 by Shagbark
Peer review was at F12125052?thread=6594095
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Posted Jun 12, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
I've just finished subbing this - please let me know if it's ok or not, and if there's any changes you want to make 
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Posted Jun 12, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
if there's --> if there're 
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Posted Jun 12, 2009 by Shagbark
I usually don't abbreviate <there are>.
I wonder if that last sentence will get dated quickly.
Rather than say at the age of 76 perhaps we should say 'into his golden years' or some such euphemism .
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
How about that?
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Shagbark
perhaps 'in December of '08 Little Richard turned 76 and still going strong'
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Shagbark
 <<and still going>> I meant and was still going
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
How about: "Having celebrated his 76th birthday in December 2008, Little Richard is still going strong."
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Shagbark
that is better.
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
Ok to send it off now then?
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Shagbark
I'm OK with it
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
Oh, one thing I've just remembered 
"About this time, Richard married Ernestine Campbell. However, married life didn't fit in with his chosen lifestyle, and after six years waiting for him to settle down his wife finally got a divorce."
I recall reading somewhere while fact-checking the entry that he married her after converting and becoming a preacher - is this paragraph in the right place?
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Shagbark
a little more research.
from written biograpies:
Earnestine: I meet Richard in 1957 when he came to speak at an evangelistic meeting in Washington DC.
courtship began Nov. 1957 Marriage July 1959
I hadn't appreciated his popularity worldwide and it was like I was kind of intruding on something the world wanted.
Charles Penniman(brother): I wasn't happy at all about the marriage. I felt like the church of god was putting Earnestine on Richard"
conclusions: This was after Tutti Fruiti,
It was before he became Seventh Day Adventist.
I would place this in the paragraph connected to 1959 (if there is one)
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Shagbark
I had assumed that the college he studied at was Seventh day Adventist
Perhaps I was wrong. Which could invallidate the paragraph on U-Turn.
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
I've moved the paragraph - let me know if the U-Turn section needs any changes.
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Shagbark
the college is Oakwood University (then Oakwood college) 7000 Adventist Blvd Huntsville AL.
so I prsume when he got his degree he converted.
He was not yet a Softmore when he met Earnestine and presumably the meeting was Church of God in Christ. So I guess no change is needed.
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
So is the paragraph about his marriage in the correct place now - can I send this off?
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Posted Jun 15, 2009 by Shagbark
sorry to keep delaying this but Instead of saying <<about this time>> can we say 'In 1959 Richard married...'
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Posted Jun 16, 2009 by Alex 'Tufty' Ashman [!]
Done
Anything else need doing?
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Posted Jun 16, 2009 by Shagbark
I think that's it
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