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One of my favourite things (apart from raindrops on roses and whiskers on kittens) is to be presented with a large pile of scripts.  Like the late Geoffrey Perkins, I approach every script with the feeling that this will be the one, the game-changer, the next classic comedy.  Although life is full of disappointment, the feeling of potential excitement never goes away.

So it was a real treat to spend a day with the entries for the BBC writersroom Laugh Track competition, along with writer, comedian and podcaster Danielle Ward, radio producer Victoria Lloyd, and writersroom luminaries Kate Rowland and Paul Ashton.

A previous sift had divided the scripts into four categories - yes, maybe yes, maybe no, and no -  so our task was to provide second opinions and come up with, as it were, a long shortlist from which the final candidates would be chosen for a development workshop, leading to rewrites and the final showcase selection.

In the nature of things, people’s opinions of comedy, and of scripts, differ, so in the end the categories became fluid, with some scripts being promoted at the expense of others which were demoted.  What we ended up with was a wide range of comedy styles, from old-style jokey shows to more contemporary pieces.  Some scripts felt more or less like the finished article, while some had tremendous promise but betrayed the writers’ inexperience.

My three favourites, which I hope will make the final cut, were hugely diverse.  One was a first script by a young writer who had come across the competition, undertaken a crash course in how to write a sitcom, and produced a piece that felt genuinely fresh and funny.  The second, with a rather darker feel, was beautifully plotted and very surprising, albeit definitely post-watershed.  And the third made brilliant use of a single setting.

However, for anyone who wants to enter other competitions, or indeed have their work taken seriously, there was some general lessons.

First, the requirement was for an audience sitcom, which means a show where stories are told in a limited number of sets, perhaps with some brief location filming, and recorded in front of an audience.  Nothing could be clearer.  So it was odd to find a number of scripts which couldn’t be made in front of an audience, and in some cases were sit-trag rather than sitcom.

Passing over the script which was obviously written in 2000 and plucked from the bottom drawer without any references being updated to 2012, several submissions were set in research stations at either pole, or in the jungle.  It’s always useful to think about where produced shows are or have been set - home, office, workplace, and so on.  If a setting hasn’t been used, then is it likely that no one else will have thought of it?  Or is it more likely that the setting doesn’t work and is not in demand?

A piece of conventional wisdom is that sitcom characters are trapped, but this doesn’t mean that they have to be physically trapped, rather that they are trapped in their psychological situation.  Harold Steptoe wanted to leave Albert, but he was stuck with a guilt-inducing father rather than unable to leave the scrapyard.

Another piece of conventional wisdom, which many entrants happily ignored, is that every script should have a story, and that the story should begin within the first three pages.  Getting to page 15 without a clue of what was going on and what story I was being told was just depressing.  Funny dialogue is fine, but it has diminishing returns if it’s just people being funny without a context.

And the final piece of conventional wisdom, which again shouldn’t really need re-stating, is that characters need to have their own voices.  If everyone sounds the same, then it’s just the writer’s voice.  There’s a venerable test - if you cover up the character names and just read the dialogue, can you tell who is speaking?  If you can, the characters are clear.  If you can’t, they’re not.

It was a treat to be back within the bosom of the BBC, particularly since we met in a rackety, decaying office of the old style, rather than in a section of an antiseptic, open plan floor, or a glass-walled meeting room with a jokey name and inadequate sound-proofing.

Congratulations to the writers who will be progressing, and the very best of luck.

Micheal Jacobs is a producer and script editor, and former head of the BBC's College of Comedy.

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  • Comment number 24. Posted by geoff Tristram

    on 11 May 2012 14:51

    Hello Paul (Ashton I mean). Geoff Tristram here. I know this is a hell of a boring question, but I sent you a script entitled Losing the Plot during your window of opportunity, and I don't have a clue if you've read these things yet, or how we find out if our stories were any good or not. Do we get some form of email telling us? I don't even know for sure if it arrived! I'd love to know, if it's no trouble, preferably via gt@geofftristram.co.uk but if not, via your site. Before I go, i must share this with you all. I must be the only person in the world who has been injured by a Shredded Wheat. I took one out of the box, tried to break it into bits and it stabbed me. I bled all over the work surface and it looks all septic and angry now. (my thumb, not the work surface.) Watch out folks. Danger is lurking in your cereals. I will ignore the obvious cereal killer jokes. They are beneath me. Anyway, if you could, Paul, I'd be ever so grateful. Ta! gt

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  • Comment number 23. Posted by Paul Ashton

    on 25 Apr 2012 12:47

    Claire - you should consider going for radio sketch shows, which occasionally open their doors via our opportunities page. And consider getting your sketches out on the internet, where people are increasingly looking at/for new talent

  • Comment number 22. Posted by Clare Harrison

    on 19 Apr 2012 22:34

    Hi sorry to keep writing on here, I know you are very busy. I wonder if you would be so kind as to let me know where to go next with my sketch show? I knew I wouldn't win this because you asked for a sitcom not a sketch show but I had to grab a chance to try and get my work seen by the professionals . If you have some time would you please be so kind as to give me some feedback please and professional advice on where to go next. I did not receive an email . My sketch show on youtube is the following link, maybe if you have time you could please contact me on there if my email did not work. Yours Faithfully.

    Clare Harrison
    www.youtube.com/yoginiclare

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  • Comment number 21. Posted by Clare Harrison

    on 19 Apr 2012 21:48

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  • Comment number 20. Posted by Jonathan James

    on 18 Apr 2012 11:19

    Hi Paul,

    Sorry to bother you, I didn't receive a confirmation or an acceptance/rejection email either. I'm the writer of Fairy Dust and it's jonathan.james@clipbored.co.uk

    Thanks for your help!

    Jonathan

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  • Comment number 19. Posted by Paul Ashton

    on 17 Apr 2012 11:01

    everyone - we are slowly working our way through the queries emails we've received into our general inbox so please bear with us ... ! we're a very small team so these things can take some time

  • Comment number 18. Posted by Craig

    on 16 Apr 2012 19:47

    Same here. I have checked my spam folder and not received anything (confirmation or rejection). My email would have been on my script and on the form. I also understand the amount of administration, but it would be reassuring to know if my script was at least read. I can provide further details here or to an email address if the information helps. It would be a shame to miss the chance to be involved in such a great opportunity!

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  • Comment number 17. Posted by cs09j

    on 16 Apr 2012 18:37

    I'm in the same boat. I've not had previous problems receiving correspondence from Writersroom before in relation to my email client. Without wishing to be a pain, is there any way we might be able to follow up on the status of our scripts? I appreciate the admin that logging and reading 800 scripts requires...

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  • Comment number 16. Posted by Rvs1

    on 16 Apr 2012 18:31

    Hi Paul

    Thank you for this information.
    I didn't receive a confirmation or rejection email either; I supplied the correct email address on my application form and in the header of my script, so it shouldn't have bounced back. I have also checked my spam folder and there is nothing in there.

    I have emailed the writersroom with my details to check if my script was actually received but I haven't had a response. I sent it via special delivery and it was signed for at the address by someone called Adam.

    I understand that if it was looked at my submission must have been unsuccessful, but you have mentioned on here that you would be letting people know how far in the process their script progressed. This would be really useful information for a developing writer.

    Do you know if laugh track query emails are still being answered and if I can expect to hear anything back?

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  • Comment number 15. Posted by Paul Ashton

    on 16 Apr 2012 15:45

    Everyone - all the emails have gone out - some have bounced back, and some can tend to end up as spam so you should check your spam folder ... but basically, we have now contacted everyone who's through to the next stage ...we know there'll be lots of disappointed people who aren't - there were only 20 or so spaces for more than 800 people applying. so although not being invited will feel like a rejection, we're not necessarily saying your script isn't any good - only that we've had to choose a very small proportion that we were most excited about ...

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