Say what you mean and mean what you say
Hi Alfonso. Thanks for your latest blog. Once again, you've written with great enthusiasm and passion about your country. I like the way you try to take the reader on a journey with your descriptions.
Sentences like these here really draw the reader in:
Let's go together through the mountains of Columbia...
Pop up your heads and just take a look around. What do you see?
This type of writing sets the scene well and engages the readers by making them feel you are guiding them somewhere interesting. Well done!
Sometimes your enthusiasm gets the better of you and it's difficult to understand what you mean. In this blog I'd like to look at three words or expressions you've used which I don't understand or are wrong in this context.
This is what you've written. The words in bold are where I don't understand the sense:
1. Believed or not, with Coffee. I swear of God is true!
2. ...make a living spinning off around the coffee.
3. Music is less festive, just a little bit sorrow but beautiful and sticky.
Alfonso, for this homework I would like you to try to have another go at writing these sentences in a clearer way for the reader. Think about what you are trying to say and express it as clearly and simply as you can. Other followers of this blog, I'd like you to help Alfonso. Do you know a better way of saying in English what he has written above? Help each other!
• draw the reader in - make the reader believe your story.
• sets the scene - describes a situation before you tell a story.
• engages - interests someone.
• gets the better of you - allows you to do something you know is wrong.
• to have another go at - try again.