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Writing in a specific literary form
Which of the following is the most effective piece of description?
A really nice vase of flowers was on the window ledge.
A wonderful display of flowers was on the window ledge.
The vibrant colours of the vase of flowers on the window ledge seemed to bring the whole room to life.
I remember the old railway station well - it was always crowded with men and children playing. We used to sit on the steps and watch the cargo being unloaded. Sometimes we would get an orange and sit and eat that.
I remember the old railway station well - it was situated in the High Street about a mile from where we used to live. It was opposite a grocer's shop and a bakery.
I remember the old railway station well - it was always crowded with men shouting orders and children playing and laughing with one another. We used to sit on the rough stone steps and watch the sacks of tea and oranges being unloaded. Sometimes we would be thrown an orange by the foreman and would spend hours sucking its sweet, tangy flesh.
The room was dark and a faint smell of last night's tobacco hung in the air.
There was a strong smell of tobacco in the room.
The room was dark and stuffy.
Mary was 15 and her red hair hinted at a strong determination to succeed.
Mary was 15. She had long red hair which she tied up in a band. She was very bossy and tried to get her own way
Mary was 15 and she wanted to do well. She had long red hair.
Mary passed her Standard Grade exam.
Mary sailed through her Standard Grade exam.
Mary did well in her Standard Grade exam but she didn't work very hard for it.